|
下面这篇是比较早的一篇作文,Vicky老师让孩子们写一篇有关蛇的Non-fiction文章,不知怎么海琳以为是从网上找一篇有关蛇的文章,于是她花了一个晚上的时间,查阅了好多有关蛇的介绍,选了一个最感兴趣的文章,复制粘贴交了作业。Vicky老师很震惊,以为海琳是作弊,以抄袭的方法糊弄作业,但是她没有发火,而是问清了海琳的想法,平心静气地要求海琳重新完成这篇作文。明白了老师的意思后,她整理了从网上收集的介绍,写出了下面这篇作文。
Green anacondas are one of the world's longest snakes,reaching more than 8.8 meters long and (weights) weighing more than 227 kilograms. They live in swamps, marshes, and slow-moving streams, mainly in the tropical rain forests of the Amazon.
Green anacondas go hunting only when they are hungry. They hunt big prey(s), such as deer(s),sheep, dogs and jaguars, but sometimes they eat turtles or bird eggs. They swallow their prey instead of eating it. Many legends say (about) green anacondas eat people, but that’s still a question for today.
Good work, Hay Lin!
Your writing is much easier to understand than the material you copied last week. You are a good writer and are too hard on yourself.
You are still a young girl and have many years to grow. Be patient and we will learn more together. I will help you become the English writer, speaker, and reader you wish to become. I love and appreciate you! – Miss Vicky
[ 本帖最后由 学而妈妈 于 2012-9-4 09:50 编辑 ] |
评分
-
查看全部评分
|