本帖最后由 黑夜里的眼睛 于 2013-8-31 22:30 编辑
跟一篇女儿上节课的作业。红字为Vicky老师批改的。我感觉女儿的写作终于开窍了!
World in My Eyes I’m a swallow, and I live in theforest. There are no human beings’villages near the forest. Every day, I’ll I singand fly in the forest. However,yesterday my friend told me, he flew to the world of human beings. He said the human beings’ world is sodifferent with from our world. Then, he flew away. I’m so curious about the world of humanbeings. So, I went to their world today. The first thought when I arrived at thehuman beings’ hometown, is how SMELLY here is itis here! Something with fourround circles and which gave out smellygray gases were making loud noises! Iflew up to a tall cuboid and looked at itcuriously. “What is this thing? It isn’t a tree.” I thought. When I looked up, I stared at the sky; it’s not the cerulean in theforest. It is dust blue. “Maybe otherplaces in this world are better than here. I thought. I flew around thisplace. The streams were just like a gray snake which gaveout stinky smells. There were only a fewof trees in the human beings’ hometowns. The sun was moving to the west sidenow. It was time to go home. I flew to the forest. “Our home is so much better than humanbeings’.” I told my mom when I was back,“The air in our home town is better, the sky is bluer; and here bluer, and we have no noisy cars!” I sat in the nest. I felt so tired after this trip. I am going to take a rest now. The night is coming. The forest is quite quiet. I liedown in the nest, and fall asleep.
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