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once apon(upon) a time there was a rabit(rabbit) with very long ears, on a rainy day he found a mushroom, it was red with dots, he liked it, and stored it in his hole. the next day he went to the place were(where) he found the mushroom (before), but he did not find any of the kinde (any more), so he waited untill dark, and still he waited, he waited four days and nights , and as far as I know, he was still waiting!
括号中是我修改的,不用她提醒我也看出来了,结尾部分有 fantasy mr fox 的影子
[ 本帖最后由 小荷才露尖尖角 于 2008-4-12 23:31 编辑 ] |
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