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Chapter Eight

The re-public

The re-public is a kind of parliament,  those who are in the parliament are those who are important,  like jedis,  kings and so on.
In there you can see many cretures ( the Jedi is like that too).

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言之有理。正处于盲目阶段，感谢楼主及时指导！

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Chapter Nine

The beaten re- public

At now days the re- public was controlled by the Sith,  because almost all the Jedi were killed,  and all the forces ( like the clones),
had joined them.

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Chapter Ten

The Galaxy controlled by the Sith

At last the Sith ‘s leader was known and to all the Jedi’s and to there-public surprise it was the man whom they are supose to pretect,  
and he killed almost all the Jedi Master and student.  Only one Jedi was left, but he turned to the dack side…..

In the meantime a new,  and more powerful Jedi was born,  and Ou Bi Wang and You Ta ( who was the only Jedi master left )
taught the young Jedi things.

And there is hope at last.

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Chapter Eleven

The last hope

Soon the young Jedi grew up,  and his father and mother were killed in a fire disaster,  so he lived alone.

As Ou Bi Wang found out that he is a Jedi,  he immediately introduced the young Sky waker ( that is the young Jedi’s name) to master

You Ta.

You Ta trained the young Jedi carefully. The trained Jedi joined in the army that attack the Sith,  Sky waker began an edventure with

Ou Bi Wang and found out that the dack Jedi was his father.

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My growing tooth

Yesterday when I was drawing I use my tongue to lick one tooth,  in that instant I know that I had a little tooth that has grow in the back of my sharpest tooth.
At first I regretted that it was only a piece of noodle,  but after licking it once,  twice,  three times I finally accepted the terrible truth that my first thought was right and
the other thought was wrong.
Oh I have to go to the dentist.

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Yesterday when I was drawing， I used my tongue to lick one tooth,  in that instant I knew that I had a little tooth that has grown in the back of my sharpest tooth.
Then I regretted that it was only a piece of noodle,  but after licking it once,  twice,  three times I finally accepted the terrible truth that my first thought was right and
the other thought was wrong.
Oh I have to go to the dentist.
你的用词非常传神，比如in that instant ，足见基本功深厚。对时态的连惯性多加注意，你的文章会更加完美。第一感觉是牙齿，面条应该是你随后的反应吧。

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Chapter Twelve

The destroy of the Death Star

The Death Star is a well known man-made star,  I do not Know how to built it but,  I know that the Death Star is built for one reason: that is the base for the sith.

It seems that there is no way to destroy it,  but the good forces must destroy it,  so they thinked and thinked,  at last they found out that a big hole connect the
outer-world to the heart of the Star, and they went to attack it.

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Winter and sports

Winter is coming, and some country is snowing, Bei Jing for instance.
If it snows I can play snowball war, and make snowman, if I can go up to a mountain I will ski.
If the river freezes I can ice-skate.

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Winter and sports

Winter is coming, and some country is snowing, Bei Jing for instance.
If it snows I can play snowball war, and make snowman, if I can go up to a mountain I will ski.
If the river freezes I can ice-skate.
Bei Jing与some country不是很一致，有两种改进的办法：把some country改成some city；或者把Bei Jing改成England/Switzerland.你能很好的用英语把自己的意思完整地表达出来，非常棒！！！